Next take two...

I have completed editing and handed my second draft of my film opening, the mark I got back was a C. Satisfactory but not great, to improve my grade I plan on re doing my sound, making it more smooth and adding a more jumpy sound track to the jumpy parts. I also plan on making my transitions smoother, as well as cutting down a certain part of it so interest doesn't stray. However i plan on keeping most of the background noise out, as it gives my opening a more realist theme, which in what i want.